In the creative writing textbook I will be using this fall, The Practice of Creative Writing, by Heather Sellers, I find so many craft related points that would work for Composition just as well as creative writing. However, this one leaves me in a state of wonder:

“The Goal of revision: intensify the work so it makes a moving picture inside the reader’s mind. Your trick, what you are trying to pull off: The reader forgets she is reading at all–she has an experience.” (361)

And this completely confirms why I have enjoyed all the novels I’ve read recently–they have been truly immersive. I read them, aware that I was looking at a page and actively READING… Yet, I felt myself in a 3-dimensional world that I could see, hear, feel, etc simultaneously. Amazing novels make it possible to trek the Himalayas while lying still.

What parallel statement could I create for the goal of revision of an academic essay?